I am a high school student,the college entrance examination is coming,I kept give myself the excuse to relax.But no one would be disappointed.No one would even know.Though I am a boy looks very nice,but I can stop,because I have a great dream,"if you

I am a high school student,the college entrance examination is coming,I kept give myself the excuse to relax.But no one would be disappointed.No one would even know.Though I am a boy looks very nice,but I can stop,because I have a great dream,"if you
I am a high school student,the college entrance examination is coming,I kept give myself the excuse to relax.But no one would be disappointed.No one would even know.Though I am a boy looks very nice,but I can stop,because I have a great dream,"if you have a dream,you must depend it"!in my opinion,dream is not necessary lonely on the way,in fact,I need most is to support voice,every day is can feel happy.I really hope I can have a good man accompany me to struggle for the dream.

I am a high school student,the college entrance examination is coming,I kept give myself the excuse to relax.But no one would be disappointed.No one would even know.Though I am a boy looks very nice,but I can stop,because I have a great dream,"if you
高中生能写出这样的短文已是很不错的了.加油!
有几个地方需要改进：
I am a high school student,the college entrance examination is coming,I kept [give -> giving] myself [the -> an] excuse to relax.But no one would be disappointed.No one would even know.Though I am a boy [加上 who] looks very nice,[删去 but] I can stop,because I have a great [dream -> dreamer],"if you have a dream,you must depend it"!in my opinion,[dream -> dreaming] is not necessary lonely [on the -> in a] way,in fact,[加上 what] I need most is to support [my?] voice,every day [is -> I] can feel happy.I really hope I can have a good man [加上 to] accompany me to struggle for the dream.

我的梦想 考上安徽大学高考顺利我的梦想 考上安徽大学你也是高三学生吗？我刚刚才登陆，没有及时看到，很抱歉我刚刚才登陆，没有及时看到，很抱歉不是 高一的不过目标是安徽大学没事恩恩有理想！加油↖(^ω^)↗，看好你我是过来人，我要告诉你的是，高一一开始就打好基础，高三时才会游刃有余，一开始打好基础是很重要的！我知道 可我选理 好难？你们高二分文理还是高一？如果没有选文理，就凭...

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