帮我看看这封信有什么大的问题没?谁会写商务信,格式帮我改改.Dear Mr.Blatter,.Good Day.If you are reading this letter,thank god,it is my honor Without much ado,I’ll cut to the point.It was a major success of the 2010 World Cu

帮我看看这封信有什么大的问题没?谁会写商务信,格式帮我改改.Dear Mr.Blatter,.Good Day.If you are reading this letter,thank god,it is my honor Without much ado,I’ll cut to the point.It was a major success of the 2010 World Cu
帮我看看这封信有什么大的问题没?
谁会写商务信,格式帮我改改.
Dear Mr.Blatter,
.Good Day.
If you are reading this letter,thank god,it is my honor
Without much ado,I’ll cut to the point.
It was a major success of the 2010 World Cup,I am happy with all the results.And it’s great to see that football fans from all over the world were getting along well with each other.
The playing skills are increased in all the competing nations,but,as you may know,we china is a country that has millions of football fans,we really love the FIFA World Cup,yet it is so far from us.
We Chinese have long lost faith in our football team and in those players,and I know that you might not be pleased with that.
But I believe in God’s immutable fairness,our national football team,our football players are far behind the standard of the 32 qualified teams in South Africa.
So,I,also represent all the football fans from China,sincerely hopes that you might force some powerful suggestions to our Chinese Football Association,that our Football League should be dismissed.
Ours League is full of scandals,crimes,and all those dirty things.I am very sad about Chinese Football Pro League,though I’ve been a faithful fan for a whole 12 years.
As a Chinese,I am very ashamed of our Football,and I really hope that you can understand.
We Chinese football fans are the kindest in the world,we don’t have any football thugs,we were not a part of international football gambling.
Our national team loses every time,yet we never shift our focus on them.We are suffering here.We demand CHANGE.
If the Chinese Pro Football League continues it’s original way,more referees will cease to scrupulously abide by their football morals,and more and more excellent players will lose their chance even to play for us.To sum it all up,we Chinese sincerely hopes that you can help to dismiss the Chinese Football Pro League.
Football is more like a spirit opium to us,it inspired us unlimitedly.Please,Please help us.
God bless you and FIFA
Football Fan from China
我是想让大家帮我改一改格式，别让人看咱中国球迷没水平。

帮我看看这封信有什么大的问题没?谁会写商务信,格式帮我改改.Dear Mr.Blatter,.Good Day.If you are reading this letter,thank god,it is my honor Without much ado,I’ll cut to the point.It was a major success of the 2010 World Cu
Dear Mr.Blatter,
Hello.My name is ***,one of the football fans from China.
The 2010 World Cup was a great success!I am happy with all the results.And it’s great to see that football fans from all over the world get along well with each other.
The playing skills are increased in all the competing nations,but,as you may know,we China is a country that has millions of football fans,we really love the FIFA World Cup,though it is so far from us.
We Chinese have long lost faith in our football team and in those players,and I know that you might not be pleased with that.
But I believe in God’s immutable fairness,our national football team is far behind the standard of the 32 qualified teams in South Africa.
So,I represent all the football fans from China,hoping sincerely that you can give some powerful suggestions to our Chinese Football Association and that our Football League should be dismissed.
Our League is full of scandals,crimes,and other dirty things.I am very sad about Chinese Football Pro League,though I’ve been a faithful fan of it for 12 years.
As a Chinese,I am very ashamed of our Football,and I really hope that you can understand.
We Chinese football fans are the kindest in the world,we don’t have any football thugs,we were not part of the international football gambling.
Our national team loses every time,yet we never shift our focus on them.We are suffering here.We demand CHANGE.
If the Chinese Pro Football League continues it’s original way,more referees will cease to scrupulously abide by their football morals,and more and more excellent players will lose their chances to play for us.To sum it up,we Chinese sincerely hope that you can help to dismiss the Chinese Football Pro League.
Football is more like a spirit opium to us,it inspires us unlimitedly.Please,Please help us.
God bless you and FIFA
Yours Sincerely
****
楼主的文章写得情真意切,只是格式不好.现帮你略作了修改,

Fack Blatter! 2010FIFA WORLDCUP sucks！

Dear Mr. Blatter,

。Good Day.
If you are reading this letter, thank god, it is my honor .
Without much ado, I’ll cut to the point.
It was a major success of the 2010 World Cu...

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Dear Mr. Blatter,

。Good Day.
If you are reading this letter, thank god, it is my honor .
Without much ado, I’ll cut to the point.
It was a major success of the 2010 World Cup, I am happy with all the results. And it’s great to see that football fans from all over the world were getting along well with each other.
The playing skills are increased in all the competing nations, but, as you may know, we china is a country that has millions of football fans, we really love the FIFA World Cup, yet it is so far from us.
We Chinese have long lost faith in our football team and in those players, and I know that you might not be pleased with that.
But I believe in God’s immutable fairness, our national football team, our football players are far behind the standard of the 32 qualified teams in South Africa.
So, I, also represent all the football fans from China, sincerely hopes that you might force some powerful suggestions to our Chinese Football Association, that our Football League should be dismissed.
Ours League is full of scandals, crimes, and all those dirty things. I am very sad about Chinese Football Pro League, though I’ve been a faithful fan for a whole 12 years.
As a Chinese, I am very ashamed of our Football, and I really hope that you can understand.
We Chinese football fans are the kindest in the world, we don’t have any football thugs, we were not a part of international football gambling.
Our national team loses every time, yet we never shift our focus on them. We are suffering here. We demand CHANGE.
If the Chinese Pro Football League continues it’s original way, more referees will cease to scrupulously abide by their football morals, and more and more excellent players will lose their chance even to play for us. To sum it all up, we Chinese sincerely hopes that you can help to dismiss the Chinese Football Pro League.
Football is more like a spirit opium to us, it inspired us unlimitedly.Please, Please help us.


God bless you and FIFA


Football Fan from China

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1. China is a country that has millions of football fans, we really love World Cup, however it is still so far from us.
2. I am very ashamed of our Football as a Chinese....
3. Chinese footbal...

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1. China is a country that has millions of football fans, we really love World Cup, however it is still so far from us.
2. I am very ashamed of our Football as a Chinese....
3. Chinese football fans are the kindest in the world, we don’t have any football thugs, we were not a part of international football gambling(sorry but we r).
4. Football is more like a spirit opium to us (better cut the opium)

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这封信是一位中国的球迷给布拉特的一封信，写得很好！！没有什么问题！